" Neverland"

jjktunes · Post by **jjktunes** » Thu May 14, 2009 2:59 pm

It's funny, either you do or you don't like songs like this, there is no in between. I don't make a habbit of listening to sad songs because it really gets to me.

ontariolightning · Post by **ontariolightning** » Thu May 14, 2009 5:49 pm

I think this is a pretty good song but it didn't make me cryIt's going to be hard to get someone to sing this as it's in the first person, if it were in the second person or third I am sure Gary Levox would have put more consideration to cutting it because he's not going to sing about running a kid over

ontariolightning · Post by **ontariolightning** » Thu May 14, 2009 5:51 pm

oh and your bridge is the best as it could be.. shedding light on what HAPPENED, so don't listen to people who are telling you to rewrite the bridge

jjktunes · Post by **jjktunes** » Fri May 15, 2009 3:37 am

Wow, thats funny you say that about the first person writing. I was told that first person is the best way to convey this type of lyric.

wordwoman · Post by **wordwoman** » Sun May 17, 2009 6:06 am

Jay,I'd keep this in first person for sure....just my two cents!Jan

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