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[Hookjaw Brown]

I got a critique that I don't understand on a blues tune - Parking Meter Blues - http://www.taxi.com/hookjawbrown
It was:
"good form
,, why not introduce a radical transition, contrast along the way.. ? you can write in contour , melodic range even within the confines of a blues song"

Does anyone know what "contour, melodic range" means in this context.

Thanks

[Len911]

Maybe the screener was thinkin' Elvis's Jailhouse Rock. This song felt like maybe it was the blues song that inspired jailhouse rock.
I don't know if there was a blues song as such, but Elvis was certainly a radical transition at the time for a blues song, and I could see where his song might fit the bill, I guess it would be a good example anyway of what the screener commented.

[DorothyWallace]

Hookjaw,

Cool Song! If it was a custom critique, you can email Taxi and ask them to explain it to you. I had an issue like that and Robin Frederick emailed me back with a critique.

From my experience, I think they want you to change it up a bit.. maybe add a bridge in a different key with some fast syncopated or scat type lyrics, then come back to the original song.

Dorothy

[glender]

Don't feel bad, Keb Mo never got a forward here either

[Hookjaw Brown]

Keb Mo! Now that does make me feel better.....