3/3 return from Screener 256

[Kelil]

Cheers for the return, Nothing wrong with the songs as you said they just are more of the Pop/rock than the edgy rock'n'roll of Lou Reed and Paul Westerberg.

She Blew Me Away - ''i like this. a real good, buoyant Pop song, with an engaging melody & a sweet lyric. performance is also engaging. i don't feel that this is exactly right for this listing, though. it isn't quite the literate (as in literary) rock'n'roll the listing is looking for. to me, this is a strong song, though, that might fit better in a Pop or Alt. Pop listing''

Arrabella ''again, a real good song that i think might be a better fit with a Pop listing. a strong melody that is engagingly structured. also, another cool lyric that is both a strength as well as why this is not a good fit here. it has a sweetness & bounce that is not quite the angst-y vibe they are seeking. strong performance. ''

Busy With My Own Dreams ''three for three. another really cool tune, with an imaginative arrangement, a solid melody, and a fun lyric. performance is really impressive, as it seems halfway between singing and acting. but, this here is a Pop song, my friend. ''

Style Not close enough for what the listing asked for. more of a Pop, or Alt. Pop style than the edgy rock'n'roll of PAUL WESTERBERG & LOU REED

Overall Comments
hey stephen - this is an excellent submission. i thoroughly enjoyed all three songs. the melodies are excellent, and the overall feel is just completely engaging, in the way that good Pop music is. it has a strong emotional resonance, catchy melodies, cool story lines that will have the listener rooting for the protagonist (you) in the songs. i do think this is a better fit for a Pop listing of some kind, but i also think it might work for Indie Folk listings, which now usually reference MUMFORD & SONS. i feel like there is some kinship between your Pop style & their Folkish Pop. best of luck to you and thanx for the submission

Bio Comments Bio Is fine as it is

Reason for return i am returning this because stylistically, its not quite right for this listing,

[AndyKotz]

Congratulations Stephen....

Your music made an impact. And an impression with one who counts (in the scheme of things)!!

It was a success in my estimation and now you know exactly where those songs belong...

Continued success. -- Andy

[Kelil]

Cheers Andy, yeah I'm having a look at some listings now and I'm thinkin of heading down the John Mayer comtemporary Pop/rock area as well as delving into the fleet fox/Mumford and sons indie folk listings.

I've already had a forward to a midwestern indie label in the last few weeks by the co-owner of the listing company but it looks like I've missed the mark on this one. At least now I know what route to head down but any money says I'll probably end up getting it wrong again

Stephen