Looking for some input

[johnlewitt]

Martin,

I agree with the other posts about it sounding dated.

If you did update the sounds, I think the composition itself would work or a sports segment on a tv show or news broadcast.

John

[bobporri]

Marty,

There are a lot of good ideas going on in this tune. I think things get a little cluttered sometimes but you have several good parts. I like the section with the descending bass. I think some of the clutter comes from the rhythmic repetitive synth part. Maybe pull it in and out or back a bit especially when other things start getting busier. Yeah, I agree with the fact that the synths and overall sound dates this. You might find a listing for a 70's or 80's type movie scene or something like that though. Good points others made. I think jimc is on target about the bass ideas. More simply, (because although I have a lot of tools, I approach this rather simply and largely by ear) you might try bringing up 80-100 Hz area (set width as needed), bring down 200 Hz area a bit, sweep for spots in the mid and higher range to bring out sweet spots. I think if you try a few basic EQ setting changes like that you would hear some improvement.

Bob P.

[MartyH]

Thanks Bob. I'll tweak the eq settings, as mentioned, and listen. I'm trying to develop my ear for better eq choices. One of the problems I feel like I am having is everything sounds great on my reference monitors, but after I bounce, and listen on my desktop speakers the sound is dramatically different.

Pedro, I'll think about how I can make some changes. I'm not reluctant to improve a track. But I feel if I make substantial changes, I might as well just create a new song.

[Russell Landwehr]

One of the problems I feel like I am having is everything sounds great on my reference monitors, but after I bounce, and listen on my desktop speakers the sound is dramatically different.

I had that problem also, where my mixes were lacking bottom end... so I turned down the subwoofer in my studio.

I'm not reluctant to improve a track. But I feel if I make substantial changes, I might as well just create a new song.

YEP! I completely understand THAT!

About the kick. It is possible you need to try a different kick patch? Sometimes you can't bring out frequencies that aren't there. Compression and drastic EQing aren't a bad thing for a kick drum. Don't be afraid of using heavy EQ on individual tracks to emphasize them or get them out of the way of other tracks.

I think the bass track might be fine (volume wise) if you can bring out the lows in the kick.

Russell