Re: I've Had Enough Of This

johnhampt · Post by **johnhampt** » Sun Sep 02, 2007 3:13 pm

Busy today with the holiday but after one listen I wll say the verses were the hook. I like what you got going so far. The chorus was ok but lacked something. I really like the way you started right in with the verse. Very catch. I will be interested to listen to more as you add to it.....

geo · Post by **geo** » Sun Sep 02, 2007 3:41 pm

Hi, ho Geo here, liked the song, I think the production needs to be changed to give the chorus more punch. I know its a rough mix but consider these changes. I like the build in the beginning, consider when the drums come in using rim shot or even better drop the snare hit on the "2" and just have it on the "4" (drums I'm sure will be "punchier ) then going for a big fill before the chorus and have the chorus "bigger" (know what I'm trying to say?) similar to the way the chorus comes in after the quiet solo section with a good driving drum pattern. The voice should get big here too, pull back from the mic and go for it, show me you've had enough!!! It's a great chorus, something that people can identify with make em sing along with you (harmonies/double vocal an option as well). Hope these comments are helpful...Geo

geo · Post by **geo** » Mon Sep 03, 2007 11:52 am

Better, yes, but you might still consider a vocalist. I can't sing a lick but am lucky that the singer from my old band loves my stuff and sings for free. This song is good, A good vocalist would tear it up!! , I don't know your set up but I know I can't afford to hire people, I found my sax player on Craig's list, maybe give that a shot, or the message board in your local music store. If your east coast drop an email maybe I can help... Geo

lsp · Post by **lsp** » Mon Sep 03, 2007 1:12 pm

Songwriter,Nice production. Very contemporary sound. Your vocal is great for the genre.If you are writing this for your own performance I think you have a very nice vehicle to build your image. If you are writing for artists that do not write their own material, I would suggest more storyline + additional imagery to strengthen the message.Good Job.LSP

geo · Post by **geo** » Tue Sep 04, 2007 4:51 am

Dude, I came back to listen again, I really like this song. I love the break part "If I could do it all again..etc" and the new drum part on the chorus. Thank you for the comments on my tune, to be honest I still am writting for my (new, in the works) band so I have to watch intros for submissions. Goodluck with this one... GeoP.S. Could you give me an idea of what you use for effects? (reverb on drums, this on voice, etc just a general overview) I am locked into my sound (80's, what does it say that I didn't even realise it , hope retro is in )and looking for a way out!!!

squidlips · Post by **squidlips** » Wed Sep 05, 2007 5:52 am

Hey Song,Just caught this song. Far be it from me to disagree with anyone else but your voice works perfectly for this song. Very nice! As for some changeups, perhaps actually stopping the song for a few seconds (or even adding in some effect during that break) before launching into the 2nd chorus might be an effective answer to adding some punch without adding any instrumentation. I only recommend this after watching Justin Timberlake (do not groan you guys, he did a great job on HBO the other night) and he used that technique on one tune that had a similar, busy piano part (which he played beautifully, go figure). I'm so not a big fan of his but he almost converted me, if it wasn't for all the dancing. I'm gonna go have another listen. Can you post the lyrics?I can see this working both for you personally as an artist and for film/tv, easy.

squidlips · Post by **squidlips** » Wed Sep 05, 2007 7:22 am

Okay, after taking a peek at the lyrics, I'd have to say that the theme is the teeniest bit inconsistent at the end, going from "I've had enough" to "I wouldn't change a thing", which implies you didn't mind being harrassed during the rest of the song. That'd be the only thing I could think of. For your own submission as a singer/songwriter, this is jes fine as a means of expressing yourself. And it's good for film/tv cuz it's got a very hooky sound to it. If you were pitching it to another artist, though, you might need to be more specific. I get the underlying theme but Lord knows, sometimes you have to drag them to the water to get them to hear allegory or subtleties of any kind.And, as you know, this is all jes mho. The song is cool and has tons of potential.

squidlips · Post by **squidlips** » Wed Sep 05, 2007 7:49 am

Jes listened to Shade and Shadow. You're right, interesting rhythm change-ups going on there. Almost like a three-ring circus! I liked it. It's definitely pop with edge, which I'm fond of.

squidlips · Post by **squidlips** » Wed Sep 05, 2007 11:28 am

Let me know how that turns out. I loved this song.Thanks for the PM.

squidlips · Post by **squidlips** » Wed Sep 05, 2007 2:35 pm

I was thinking......have you ever heard of a band called The Producers? (80s band).....they did a song called She Sheila that might help you out. It reminds me a bit of your song (only theirs is dated). I just googled them and got their site but couldn't find an MP3 of them on iTunes or anything or I would've bought it. I loved that song.