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[daniel481]

I think that's awesome, Aub. Definitely memorable, and it paints some cool imagery. I like how edgy it is, as well...I'm really curious to hear what this sounds like set to music. Great start!No, back to working on some of my own Dan

[Casey H]

HiI know you didn't want to post the music but I am one of those who has a hard time reviewing just lyrics, especially in rock. I need the emotion.Although I am not qualified to review country lyrics, I can tell what doesn't work off the get-go just from a read... Not here... That's just me... Any chance you'll change your mind and post the music? Feel free to PM me the link to the tune if you'd like... Casey

[matto]

Quote:Thanks again for the wisdom you so often share. Lol I'm FAR from wisdom...Quote:Save MeVs1If I were JesusIt wouldn't be enoughYou'd crucify meAgain and again for funAll I get is emptyTrying to fill you upDon't want to be SocratesYou're hemlock in my cupPrechorusYou only said that you said itTo see if I would say what you needed to feed your diseaseYou only want me to want youSo I can be a puppet on the whim of your heart string teaseChorus1Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescue2nd verseIf I could hate youThis would all be doneLoved every minuteHate what I've becomeprechorusI never meant not to mean itWish you never heard my trio of words too often saidYou know it hurts me to hurt youBut now I have to show my love by never ever loving you again Chorus 2Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescueSave meFind your messiah somewhere elseBlame mefor letting you go but that's the only way I know to(bridge)Save me - from youSave me - from yousoloChorus 3Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescueSave meFind your messiah somewhere elseBlame mefor letting you go but this time I'm not gonnaSave you I think you've got the makings of an excellent lyric here. I like the concept, I think it's strong, provocative, original.This is just after a quick read, I'll have to look at it again later, but for now the verses strike me as strongest. So much so that I was wishing the second verse could be the same length as the first.I'm wondering whether the chorus "save me from saving you from yourself" is a bit too "clever"...it just seems a little forced, like you're trying too hard to say something profound.I appreciate what you're trying to do but maybe this could be tweaked.I'm not in love with the first pre, I think it could be better. Not sure why exactly it's not working for me...The second pre is better, although the "trio" line is again a bit overly clever perhaps. The last two lines rock however. Those to me strike the perfect balance, they sound fresh but yet completely natural.Lastly I wonder if you could clarify the relationship between the two people a bit. Somehow it's still a little hazy to me. But that could just be me, hopefull others can chime in.Great start on this Aub, I think this can be a winner...excited to hear the music for this.

[daniel481]

In the spirit of Aub, here's some lyrics that I've been working on for one of my 3 songs, as well. Some critiques would be great!"Not Lost"Verse 1:I always knew this day would comeThe day when all’s been said and doneBut disbelief still smothers meMy body shivers, I gasp to breatheWhy am I fading out, I’d just begunPre 1:I’m being torn away without goodbyeBut I leave these words to help you tryTo make it through this lifeChorus:The world I know is falling downI’m losing everythingI cannot be there by your sideBut as it all comes crashing downI feel you here with meAnd I’ll be with you all the timei’ll carry you from deep insideI’m not lost cause your aliveVerse 2:The shocking pain will soon be goneBut you made my world so filled with loveYou gave me more than I’d ever needAnd every minute made it worth this griefI never thought I’d lose this far from homePre 2:I have to leave without goodbyeBut with you I know I’ll never dieYou’ll take me through your lifeBridge:Don’t worry You have to trust that I’m alrightAnd don’t be angryIt’s not your fault and it’s not mineNothing ends it just beginsMy life it starts in you againLike Aub, I'm pretty happy with the music, so I'll hopefully be posting that up shortly.Thanks again!Dan

[daniel481]

Alright, I have some music to post! These are the instrumental tracks I have for the first two songs I'm working on for this listing. They're not mixed or anything, so take that into account, but I just wanted to see what you guys think of them musically. A little less than two weeks left, I better keep crackin'! "Not Lost"http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... am=1Thanks Dots!Dan

[ciskokidd]

Hey Dan,The tracks sound great! There is very good contrast musically between the different sections. The real question will be answered when we hear the complete versions with vocals. This uber-high bar listing will depend on how good (great) your melodies, lyrics, and overall concepts are.Your off to a really good start! Can't wait to here the vocals.Best,Cisco

[daniel481]

Thanks, glad you like the music!I'm working on the vocals now and should be able to post those sometime soon...Stay tuned!Dan

[daniel481]

OK, now, it's just a chorus, everything's still un-mixed, and I still have a lot of work to do, but here's "Burn it to the Ground" again (I guess I was calling it "Burn it Down"), with the chorus vox that I finished today!I'd really like to hear what you guys think of the melody/lyrics.http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... eam=trueIf you're gonna burn itThen burn it to the groundI don't want any remindersThe flames from this fireLet 'em erase what we once foundAnd I've felt your tortureLet you bruise me kick me downA slave you desiredI'm beaten and tiredSo burn it to the groundThanks guys I really appreciate it!Dan

[Pinkstar]

Quote:Here's the listing:Commercial/Mainstream ROCK STAFF WRITERS are sought by a hugely successful industry mogul (producer/writer/executive) who has formed a new Music Group/Label. He's seeking the absolute best - writers who understand today's Rock market and can deliver hit songs to the likes of Daughtry, Evanescence, Hinder, Puddle Of Mudd, Nickelback, etc. Co-writing experience a big plus. Please submit two to three songs online or per CD/cassette, include lyrics & bio. All submissions will be screened and critiqued by TAXI and must be received no later than Dec. 18, 2007. TAXI # S071218RKSo, my plan is to send in three songs, one of them being my song "Today's Catastrophe" that I sent in for the ala Green Day listing. Here's another one I just "finished" (when is a song ever really finished, right? ) This is definitely the "hardest" of the three, and I'm curious to see what everybody thinks. "Superficial"http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... &stream=1I really appreciate it! This could be a pretty cool gig. I guess it's a long shot, but I'm going for it... Thanks!DanI like that song, especially the verses. I'm submitting for that listing also, maybe we'll be working together soon;) How cool will that be?Much SuccessxoxoxoJVB

[Pinkstar]

Wow, those tracks are very good. I better get cracking myself! Thanks for the inspiration and "kick in the ass" xoxoxoJVBQuote:Alright, I have some music to post! These are the instrumental tracks I have for the first two songs I'm working on for this listing. They're not mixed or anything, so take that into account, but I just wanted to see what you guys think of them musically. A little less than two weeks left, I better keep crackin'! "Not Lost"http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... am=1Thanks Dots!Dan