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joeymurillo · Post by **joeymurillo** » Fri Sep 04, 2009 2:06 pm

www.taxi.com/joeymurilloI wrote a song about just life and a day and moment of just what we all see. very simple..so all opinions welcome ..its rough but redoing it in nov..the right way)))Again the song is--I'm Allright

keysmandld · Post by **keysmandld** » Sat Sep 05, 2009 7:37 am

Hey joey,Well crafted song. Instrumentation sounds great! Not sure if I would pan the vocals hard right and left. Seems you are featuring the band and not the vocal. Unless that's the intended effect. Just my 2 cents, but as you say, you are planning to redo it in Nashville. Sounds like you are off to a good start! Good luck to you.

wta · Post by **wta** » Sat Sep 05, 2009 7:47 am

Good start here, i'd echo keysman on the vocals but its a demo so no worries. I lived on E58 just around the corner from Sutton Pl and Dangerfields comedy club and worked on Park Ave. South just up from grand central... Ah the good old days...

bucyboy · Post by **bucyboy** » Sat Sep 05, 2009 10:40 am

Hey Joey, could you post the lyric? It makes it easier for me to get a better idea of what you're aiming for.Buc

watksco · Post by **watksco** » Sat Sep 05, 2009 1:48 pm

Hey Joey,There's a good song in the making here.+1 on posting the lyric - it was difficult to hear at some points - perhaps remix demo with a bump on the vocalI'd revist the drum groove (particularly the chorus) and get that really worked out b4 you get to Nashville - I just thought the drum pattern you've gone with wasn't sitting 100%Also the tempo/groove change (bridge into chorus) - not sold - especially in the back end of the bridge where it starts to change - timing (and vocal phrasing) felt awkward - again another thing you'll want to get sorted 100% b4 Nashville. Also the different groove for the chorus was not to my liking (Just my opinion!)HTHCheers,Scott

ottlukk · Post by **ottlukk** » Sat Sep 05, 2009 3:44 pm

Joey: I liked the lyrics, nice message. Two (sorry) negative comments; I didn't care for the choppiness of the bridge. Also, though your voice is appealing, it's too light behind the instrumental. You have to bring it forward more. Ott

joeymurillo · Post by **joeymurillo** » Sun Sep 06, 2009 11:59 am

Thanks for your time and opinions and alot makes sense..its just a demo till we really do it..again thank you..Joey

teleblaster · Post by **teleblaster** » Sun Sep 06, 2009 12:55 pm

Nice track, good song. I think you're off to a great start here.-Ditto on the vox. The wide stereo spread isn't working for me. -I would also use a different sound on the lead guitar into too, it's very squashed and 'not-dynamic'.-Not sure if the little breakdown @ 3min works for me or not. Changing from straight to swing for that short a time feels a bit abrupt coming in and out.Overall a great tune. Best of luck with it!Erich

mojobone · Post by **mojobone** » Tue Sep 08, 2009 5:07 am

I think the lyrics could use a little more development, but I always think that. Some great feedback above, agree with most of it. I'm okay with the little half-time breakdown on the bridge. Good melody/hook.

joeymurillo · Post by **joeymurillo** » Tue Sep 08, 2009 2:03 pm

Thanks guys..thats awesome..I appreciatte you taking the time).Joey

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