"We're Done" Studio Snippet. What's it need?

[jay10music]

CAM... I hear good old country fiddles in the chorus... Still a Great song...I still love it.. Jay...

[kitz]

Cam,I really like this. What's a SongU? I think it's gotta be jealous what ever it is. This song brings back memorys and I can't help but smile!!! I mean I can't help but smile!!! I love "She's not my woman - but I'm her man"I did notice a hole after the 1st verse following the lyric "for a little while". Personally, I'd fill that with fiddle or dobro or tele or something. I like the lyric you used "wasn't thinking with my head I guess." The other head lyric is easy enough for a listener to imagine if so inclined. I would have used something like "Didn't think I'd get in such a mess" or "Didn't think it would be such a mess." But then my rhymes are getting killed by taxi reviewers lately so don't listen to me. Did you post something about Willis Allen Ramsey a couple of days ago?Kitz

[cameron]

Dec 7, 2008, 5:04pm, kitz wrote:Cam,I really like this. What's a SongU? I think it's gotta be jealous what ever it is. This song brings back memorys and I can't help but smile!!! I mean I can't help but smile!!! I love "She's not my woman - but I'm her man"I did notice a hole after the 1st verse following the lyric "for a little while". Personally, I'd fill that with fiddle or dobro or tele or something. I like the lyric you used "wasn't thinking with my head I guess." The other head lyric is easy enough for a listener to imagine if so inclined. I would have used something like "Didn't think I'd get in such a mess" or "Didn't think it would be such a mess." But then my rhymes are getting killed by taxi reviewers lately so don't listen to me. Did you post something about Willis Allen Ramsey a couple of days ago?KitzHey Kitz,Yes, I think it was you who pointed out Willis Allen Ramsey to me and I really like his stuff. I hadn't heard him before.I've already pointed out the hole at the end of the 1st verse to the studio as something that needs fixing.I'm glad you picked up the humor in the song. I don't think my SongU coach (a CMA Song of the Year writer) did. He said that this subject matter called for a slow ballad, not an uptempo happy sounding song. Maybe I needed to make it a bit more obvious?Cam