Would anybody be kind enough to listen to this?

[vicky]

great voice!!!!Casey and a few others mentioned not bringing the vocal "back down" for few sections....that seems to be a very good insite....you're working that tension in the higher part of your register, but it also keeps the vocal one dimensional....and in one dynamic...great pitch and rhythm and the recording quality is very good, too.good luck...it's all good....vicky

[dougstronach]

good voice with lots of commercial potential but I agree with the above that it is too strained for too long. You'd draw the listener in more if you balanced the full-out emotion with more subtle and quieter parts. A good producer would get this out of you and the song. Structurally it could be strengthened and made clearer.The groove is just a bit too loose for my liking -- bordering on being out of time in spots. That's another fine line to balance.HUGE POTENTIAL. Great sound to your voice. Keep at it!doug s.

[panicboy]

Very nice. Would you care to acknowledge a Daniel Powter influence? But you want suggestions I assume. Vocally, I think you may be blowing your wad too early in the song. Have you considered pulling back and staying in your lower register until the final third? The screamy stuff is good, but in moderation. If I were working with this song, I'd tighten the groove of it, and maybe bump it up another 10-15 BPM, and give it a more soulful vibe. More runs, handclaps, flights of fancy. Did that make any sense?I was just about to say that the track is screaming for a B3 but - oh, wait! There it is.