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A Toxic Fixation was" A Bad Situation"

Post by darlenemclyrics » Mon May 23, 2011 7:06 pm

:D Just a couple lil changes…I am thinking the music would be something like the song Miss Independent by Kelly Clarkson

©It’s A Bad Situation©.Darlene C. McCoy

I’m not living in reality
Cause I’m hung up on you
It’s something I can’t have
But it’s what I wanna do

Have I lost my mind
Or is it just playing tricks
I’m living in a dream
But nothing seems to fit


It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It causes me frustration
Cause it’s just not ment to be
It’s a bad situation
But you’ve gotten hold of me

I can’t blame it on fear
Of being alone by myself
I’m surrounded by those
who care like anyone else

So many times I ask myself
Am I better off without you
But it keeps coming down to
This is what I wanna do

It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It causes me frustration
Cause it’s just not ment to be
It’s a bad situation
But you’ve gotten hold of me
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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by Casey H » Mon May 23, 2011 7:52 pm

Hi Darlene
Please see my comments below... :D I don't think the point of the song is clear. If the point is you should run from the guy but you stay, I think you need to drive that home in the chorus.

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darlenemclyrics wrote::D Just a couple lil changes…I am thinking the music would be something like the song Miss Independent by Kelly Clarkson

©It’s A Bad Situation©.Darlene C. McCoy

I’m not living in reality
Cause I’m hung up on you
It’s something I can’t have (Confusing pronoun use with "it", this line and next)
But it’s what I wanna do (What do you want to do? I don't see that answered)

Have I lost my mind
Or is it just playing tricks
I’m living in a dream
But nothing seems to fit


It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It causes me frustration (Maybe "you" cause me frustration? A lot of "it" in the song)
Cause it’s just not ment to be
It’s a bad situation
But you’ve gotten hold of me (Need a line here that drives home the point of the story better)

I can’t blame it on fear
Of being alone by myself ("Alone by myself" is redundant)
I’m surrounded by those
who care like anyone else

So many times I ask myself
Am I better off without you
But it keeps coming down to
This is what I wanna do (You need to answer the question, "What do you want to do?")

It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It causes me frustration
Cause it’s just not ment to be
It’s a bad situation
But you’ve gotten hold of me

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by Nick2012 » Tue May 24, 2011 10:24 am

I'm getting it Darlene. You're infatuated with someone you know you can't have, and at the same time you know it's not healthy to maintain that infatuation because it's just going to drive you nuts. Yet you can't let it go. Sort of a viscous circle.

In some verses, "it" is the relationship you want, or "his love". In other cases, "it" is the "toxic fixation" itself. I think the lyric communicates that well. That said though, I would have to agree that "it" is used a lot. To lower the "it" count and avoid possible confusion, I'd suggest continuing to use "it" for the fixation, but not for the person. With that in mind, I'd change the first verse to something like...

I’m not living in reality
A hazy point of view
You're one man I can’t have
Yet I'm so hung up on you

And I'd change the 4th verse to something like...

So many times I ask myself
Am I better off without you
But a moth drawn to the light
Is what it keeps coming down to

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by jonathansorensen » Thu Jun 02, 2011 10:14 am

Hi Darlene,

I like the chorus. Especially the line "I have a toxic fixation" It looks reads and sounds like exactly what you mean. You might want to make that the title or even hook of the song. It's a really nice line.

For the first verse I like the lines "It's something I can't have, But it's what I wanna do" but a few of the other lines are vague and slightly cliche. "Have I lost my mind" "I'm living in a dream" "Cause I'm hung up on you".

Writers do use lines like this sometimes but for the best chance at getting a cut or a forward, you might need something more concrete and detailed. Draw a picture, for example:

watching you kiss someone else,
still can't walk away
You never even call
while I think about you all day

Not suggesting you use that but just something that introduces action and real images. But again, I really like the chorus. This lyric has great attitude.

Best,
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darlenemclyrics wrote::D Just a couple lil changes…I am thinking the music would be something like the song Miss Independent by Kelly Clarkson

©It’s A Bad Situation©.Darlene C. McCoy

I’m not living in reality
Cause I’m hung up on you
It’s something I can’t have
But it’s what I wanna do

Have I lost my mind
Or is it just playing tricks
I’m living in a dream
But nothing seems to fit


It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It causes me frustration
Cause it’s just not ment to be
It’s a bad situation
But you’ve gotten hold of me

I can’t blame it on fear
Of being alone by myself
I’m surrounded by those
who care like anyone else

So many times I ask myself
Am I better off without you
But it keeps coming down to
This is what I wanna do

It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It causes me frustration
Cause it’s just not ment to be
It’s a bad situation
But you’ve gotten hold of me

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by darlenemclyrics » Thu Jun 02, 2011 10:37 am

Thanks alot guys,,I will have to go back and add more drama,,
It's kinda hard not using words that haven't already been written..
I will post another and see if it worked out better

Thanks
Darlene

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by shoodBworkin » Thu Jun 02, 2011 2:00 pm

I like the 'toxic fixation' line too. It says a lot in just two words

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by darlenemclyrics » Thu Jun 02, 2011 3:21 pm

So everyone thinks the name should be Toxic Fixation,,I will have to rearrange the chorus and get the hook in more..as a repeatable ,,Let me see what I can do

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by darlenemclyrics » Thu Jun 02, 2011 3:58 pm

I rearranged the chorus ,,tell me what you think?

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I have a toxic fixation
That I can’t get past
It’s a bad situation
I need to run fast
It causes me frustration
Cause it’s just not ment to be
I have a toxic fixation
Cuz you’ve got a hold of me

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by Nick2012 » Thu Jun 02, 2011 10:12 pm

You've really got something there Darlene. I like that chorus a lot. The only thing I'd be inclined to change is that last line, only because I think it would help if the last line really "popped", rather than use such a common phrase. But as you say, it's hard to write and not use words that have already been written. I'm at a total loss as to an alternate phrase suggestion. Bottom line (no pun intended) is the chorus is great the way it is. The term "toxic fixation" is unique and creative enough to make the chorus grab the listener's attention.

Nick

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Re: It's A Bad Situation

Post by darlenemclyrics » Sat Jun 04, 2011 9:04 am

Thanks Nick,,,maybe I should drop that line alltogether,,It would still kick off..with toxic fixation

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