Rock Staff Writers Needed!

[deantaylor]

Dan,I really liked both songs, but applaud you for trying to get even better ones, 'cause they will need to be great. Good luck.I dropped you a PM, too.Dean

[horacejesse]

<Freakin' awesome Matt!These are the nuggets of wisdom I love to read!>How does he do it? This guy is like Saul Bellow. Ordinary words take on great meaning.

[Casey H]

Quote:BTW, long shot or not, I REALLY want this gig...so whatever I have to do to get there I'm happy to do Thanks again,DanHi DanToday's Catastrophe is another really strong song , stronger I think than the other... I have no doubt that you will land many film/TV and music library deals with your songs. They rock! It's great that you want this gig. Shoot for the stars!! While on your way (a VERY long journey) make stops at the moon and Mars... I really enjoy your music and your commitment & dedication! Casey

[silverorlead]

Thanks to all posting on this thread, from Daniel's enthusiasm and great songs to Matt's comments to everybody's great insights, I found it to be a great microcosm of the overall TAXI experience and a great lesson for me (I've only been a member for a couple months now). Just struck me as profound So gracias!-Bri

[silverorlead]

and I just realized I used the word "great" 4 times in a single sentence. A true wordsmith heheh

[sgs4u]

Welcome to the forum, where enthusiasm reigns supreme.Quote:and I just realized I used the word "great" 4 times in a single sentence. A true wordsmith heheh

[daniel481]

Thanks everyone who's been chiming in, and thanks for your kind words Casey! I'm really pumped about this thing, and in case you didn't catch it on one of my last posts, I've decided to toss these songs aside for now and I'm working on some brand new ones for this. Stay tuned...I have a pretty good feeling about these... And Michael, thanks for your critique as well. While they are mastered a bit hot, they should be well within the range of acceptable, and everywhere that I've checked them, the vocals have been loud and clear...it might have something to do with your listening setup. But these are definitely right in line with the a-las that I A-B'd them to, if not a little less squashed. Thanks for keeping me on my toes though! And also, I actually did get one forward for Today's Catastrophe last week, so I'm keeping my fingers crossed on more for that one, and some for the other one, too!

[aubreyz]

Quote:Remember, this is for a staff writer deal for rock. Most rock bands write their own songs, so the only way this "mogul" is gonna get songs cut is if his writers have stuff that's clearly better than what todays hottest rock acts write.So what you need here are "event" songs. "Signature" songs. UNDENIABLE HITS.I think the main "problem" with your songs vis-a-vis a listing like this is that conceptually they are not unique enough. Lyrically, they don't have unique hook. Matt,Thanks again for the wisdom you so often share. I hardly ever post lyrics without music, but this is such a high bar listing that I think the lyrics will have to stand on their own too. I'm happy with the music and arrangement for song#1 for this listing, but nothing really to post/hear yet. Lyrically, this is concept #4 for song #1-- I'm posting it to see how strong the concept/hooks/ideas are. At this point, I haven't really "word for word" dissected this technically. It's idea and word choice for now. The phrasing may seem odd without the flow of the music, and there are some meter issues as well that need fixing. Goals- memorable, somewhat shocking first line -- repetitive but interesting chorus (simple phrase with unique meaning), overall - unique simplicity. btw-- edited this post to make clear I'm not looking for feedback JUST from Matto Save MeVs1If I were JesusIt wouldn't be enoughYou'd crucify meAgain and again for funAll I get is emptyTrying to fill you upDon't want to be SocratesYou're hemlock in my cupPrechorusYou only said that you said itTo see if I would say what you needed to feed your diseaseYou only want me to want youSo I can be a puppet on the whim of your heart string teaseChorus1Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescue2nd verseIf I could hate youThis would all be doneLoved every minuteHate what I've becomeprechorusI never meant not to mean itWish you never heard my trio of words too often saidYou know it hurts me to hurt youBut now I have to show my love by never ever loving you again Chorus 2Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescueSave meFind your messiah somewhere elseBlame mefor letting you go but that's the only way I know to(bridge)Save me - from youSave me - from yousoloChorus 3Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescueSave meFind your messiah somewhere elseBlame mefor letting you go but this time I'm not gonnaSave you

[aubreyz]

and an afterthought... considering the first line in the lyrics above - I'm glad to live in a country where they don't flog you for naming Teddy Bears...

[squidlips]

Quote:Quote:Remember, this is for a staff writer deal for rock. Most rock bands write their own songs, so the only way this "mogul" is gonna get songs cut is if his writers have stuff that's clearly better than what todays hottest rock acts write.So what you need here are "event" songs. "Signature" songs. UNDENIABLE HITS.I think the main "problem" with your songs vis-a-vis a listing like this is that conceptually they are not unique enough. Lyrically, they don't have unique hook. Matt,Thanks again for the wisdom you so often share. I hardly ever post lyrics without music, but this is such a high bar listing that I think the lyrics will have to stand on their own too. I'm happy with the music and arrangement for song#1 for this listing, but nothing really to post/hear yet. Lyrically, this is concept #4 for song #1-- I'm posting it to see how strong the concept/hooks/ideas are. At this point, I haven't really "word for word" dissected this technically. It's idea and word choice for now. The phrasing may seem odd without the flow of the music, and there are some meter issues as well that need fixing. Goals- memorable, somewhat shocking first line -- repetitive but interesting chorus (simple phrase with unique meaning), overall - unique simplicity. btw-- edited this post to make clear I'm not looking for feedback JUST from Matto Save MeVs1If I were JesusIt wouldn't be enoughYou'd crucify meAgain and again for funAll I get is emptyTrying to fill you upDon't want to be SocratesYou're hemlock in my cupPrechorusYou only said that you said itTo see if I would say what you needed to feed your diseaseYou only want me to want youSo I can be a puppet on the whim of your heart string teaseChorus1Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescue2nd verseIf I could hate youThis would all be doneLoved every minuteHate what I've becomeprechorusI never meant not to mean itWish you never heard my trio of words too often saidYou know it hurts me to hurt youBut now I have to show my love by never ever loving you again Chorus 2Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescueSave meFind your messiah somewhere elseBlame mefor letting you go but that's the only way I know to(bridge)Save me - from youSave me - from yousoloChorus 3Save meFrom saving you from yourselfSave meThis time I'm running from the rescueSave meFind your messiah somewhere elseBlame mefor letting you go but this time I'm not gonnaSave you Well, in that vein then.....I guess my only thought on these lyrics would be the line about Socrates......throughout that verse you use "I" lines until then. Perhaps you could change it to match up a bit more? "I'm not Socrates" or whatever?Certainly a catchy first line, lol. I like the lyrics a lot.