Waiting Sure Is Tough...?

[cameron]

Hey Andy,I guess that's you singing? If so, you've got a good voice for this style of song. As for the song itself, I have to agree with most of what Claire has already said. Lyrics are pretty good throughout but just needs a little bit of magic in the hook.Cam

[jwebbinspired]

I'm sorry I am just now responding. I was in Nashville yesterday and just got back this morning. I understand what you're saying Claire. It needs to do more than just rhyme, the thought needs to belong there. Thanks Cam, it is me singing. I have an ok voice, I guess. It works enough Thanks. I am taking this song into the surgical ward today. The hook needs a serious face lift. You guys won't even notice

[cameron]

Ok... leave no scars!! Cam

[jwebbinspired]

Ok. This is a quick rewrite. I want to see if you guys think I'm going in the right direction. I used the same skeleton, but a lot of it changed. I'm not sure If I used any of the same lines. And Cam there probably are scars “Waiting Sure Is Tough”©2009 Andrew Scott Wills<v1>She’s all I think about,Every moment of the day,Tonight I’m picking her up,At a half past eight,I know it’s soon,Only our third date,But I sure miss her,I can’t wait,<chorus>So I’m pacing around,Checking my watch and thinking about her,Any minute now, I’ll look up and I’ll see her,That moment can’t come soon enough,Man, waiting sure is tough,<v2>I’m tired of waiting,I hate saying goodbye,I want to stay with her,Until the day I die,I’ve got a diamond,Clutched in my hand,And I’m waiting,To ask her a question,<v3 or bridge>Time seemed to crawl,But now it’s all a blur,Its funny how I'm always,Focused on the future,So I’m all dressed up,In this tux and tie,I’ve got nothing to do,While I wait on my bride,