Tomorrow's Kiss - ROUGH 2 verses and choruses REVISED

[Casey H]

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[bfl]

don't knock that progression I like that progression - didn't it work for Pachelbel?

really like that intro riff, too!

it feels a bit "over sweet" and that factor seems to be pushing it in a specific genre direction, but I was wondering what you were thinking, genre-wise

Are you fitting that "do not steal" line in v2 or the bridge

[waltl]

Casey,

I don't see a problem with having the same progression in the verse and chorus. The chorus still sounds quite different from the verse musically.

Nice lyric with a good hook.

Walt

[Casey H]

Thanks guys.... Still working on it... I hope it's not too 'sweet'. I originally wrote it with John Mayer in mind, thinking about his latest CD and how it's fairly retro. Not sure if that's where it's leading me though... I still have an old fart brain.

Regarding the riff... I wrote that and play it well but it's one of those things where everytime I'm in front of the mic, I mess it up... 1000 takes... Same with getting my strum pattern and timing down for recording... So Allen DeSomer has been offering some help... He's a great musician if you ever need help!

Hopefully an expanded version later...

Casey

[SWD]

Hey Casey... nice!! I'm the self proclaimed King of the same root note in the verse and chorus so to me me it sounds great ... I'm hearing a modern rock treatment... quiet intro/verse building into a big chorus... really good hook.... guess some things don't change

Peace, Geo

[Casey H]

Hey Casey... nice!! I'm the self proclaimed King of the same root note in the verse and chorus so to me me it sounds great ... I'm hearing a modern rock treatment... quiet intro/verse building into a big chorus... really good hook.... guess some things don't change

Peace, Geo

Are you THE "Geo", my old friend? If so, WELCOME BACK!!! If not, welcome to the forum too!!

Casey

[SWD]

The one and the same ... hello back at you ... back for another go at it ... like you I have a friend helping with guitar tracks trying to nail a genre ... if you got a sec check this one out.... I am having trouble with the mix and help is of course appreciated!!

Nice remaking your aquaintance

Peace, Geo


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[Casey H]

I updated the ROUGH... TWO verses now and some much better guitar stuff...

Please let me know how you think it's working as a SONG...

Casey

[SWD]

I updated the ROUGH... TWO verses now and some much better guitar stuff...

Please let me know how you think it's working as a SONG...

Casey

I think it's working just fine.... feels like it may need more of a break section near the end, musical or lyrical, between the choruses... but I like this... hear a couple of different applications.... as is acoustic, Brit/Euro POP, Pop or Pop Punk.

Good luck with it Case!!

Peace, Geo

[Casey H]

I updated the ROUGH... TWO verses now and some much better guitar stuff...

Please let me know how you think it's working as a SONG...

Casey

I think it's working just fine.... feels like it may need more of a break section near the end, musical or lyrical, between the choruses... but I like this... hear a couple of different applications.... as is acoustic, Brit/Euro POP, Pop or Pop Punk.

Good luck with it Case!!

Peace, Geo

Thanks... Yea, it will have a bridge down the road....